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Rachael's Journal
Poems and Random Thoughts
Valentine's Day
Lips like roses, eyes so fair,
by what miracle stand you there?
Come, come closer I want to share,
a breath, a kiss, a touch like air.
What silly passionate lovely bliss,
makes even love scorned seek a kiss,
and noone finds the world amiss,
when sweet love is shared like this.
A kiss, a kiss, sweet lover's quest,
sought by all with little rest,
by lips of kindness, cheeks are blest,
at the sweet siren's soft bequest.
Happy Valentine's to one and all,
Into darkness, may none fall,
but seek a peace aside the squall,
and find your heaven however small.


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  • User Comments: [2]
    AmorousCat
    Community Member





    Wed Feb 04, 2009 @ 05:02am


    I still likey this one!
    >_<

    Edward claims.
    hehe.


    Spyceh
    Community Member





    Wed Jul 08, 2009 @ 02:45am


    Grammar/spelling:
    Few spelling errors should be a quick fix.
    Content:
    Lovly.
    Though there is one line that could use so more work.
    "A kiss, a kiss sweet lover's quest,"
    Needs another comma or some revised words, and it will work nicely.
    Might be as simple as adding "A kiss, a kiss, The sweet lovers quest,"
    Additional:
    It flows incredibly well. I really liked the ending on this one besides the type you > your in the last line. It was like you wish your readers luck in finding their own happiness while you tell them not to fall for some people tricks.
    Very well done


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