Crackwhore.
Congratulations, you have just written the stupidest, most OOC piece of
s**t fanfic I have ever had the displeasure of reading. Have you any
idea how much you just utterly destroyed the characterization of Ed, Al
and Winry? Hell, ESPECIALLY Al. Cute little Al that hates seeing anyone
or anything hurt at all? Edward, who still cares for Winry as a friend
and appreciates what she does for him? Winry, who loves the boys a lot,
and worries about them every instant?
b***h, please. Not only was this hideously written with OOC-ness coming
out its arsehole and utterly boring dialogue, you managed to make every
reader who happened upon this piece of moronic literacy drop 150 IQ
points. And the only things that are making this fandom less-likeable are
idiotic fanbrats like you who thinks they're cool for writing horribly
OOC fanfiction bashing characters that could own their a** did they
really exist.
Congratulations, you win the Asshat of the Fandom award. Crawl into a
hole and die; do the Fullmetal Alchemist fandom a favour.
s**t fanfic I have ever had the displeasure of reading. Have you any
idea how much you just utterly destroyed the characterization of Ed, Al
and Winry? Hell, ESPECIALLY Al. Cute little Al that hates seeing anyone
or anything hurt at all? Edward, who still cares for Winry as a friend
and appreciates what she does for him? Winry, who loves the boys a lot,
and worries about them every instant?
b***h, please. Not only was this hideously written with OOC-ness coming
out its arsehole and utterly boring dialogue, you managed to make every
reader who happened upon this piece of moronic literacy drop 150 IQ
points. And the only things that are making this fandom less-likeable are
idiotic fanbrats like you who thinks they're cool for writing horribly
OOC fanfiction bashing characters that could own their a** did they
really exist.
Congratulations, you win the Asshat of the Fandom award. Crawl into a
hole and die; do the Fullmetal Alchemist fandom a favour.
She complimented my English. :3
You know, I appreciate a good parody as much, if not more than, the
next person - but the key word there is "good."
The problem with this fanfic is that it has no grounding in canon or
logic. A parody is only funny if it uses the series and its characters as
a springboard toward humor - if it takes the story and the characters
to an extreme where it's gotten ridiculous. This, however, features
three characters who bear utterly no resemblance to Edward, Alphonse, or
Winry, in any way.
The storyline you picked, furthermore, is grotesque and horrifying. I
suppose you were going for a dark sort of humor, but that was a
miserable failure. Quite frankly, I don't know who you are that seeing someone
beaten and terrified by those they love is high-larious for you, even
in this weak attempt at parody, but, whatev, dude.
Some nice bits about this story: You did manage to write in English,
and for the most part spell things right. For the most part.
next person - but the key word there is "good."
The problem with this fanfic is that it has no grounding in canon or
logic. A parody is only funny if it uses the series and its characters as
a springboard toward humor - if it takes the story and the characters
to an extreme where it's gotten ridiculous. This, however, features
three characters who bear utterly no resemblance to Edward, Alphonse, or
Winry, in any way.
The storyline you picked, furthermore, is grotesque and horrifying. I
suppose you were going for a dark sort of humor, but that was a
miserable failure. Quite frankly, I don't know who you are that seeing someone
beaten and terrified by those they love is high-larious for you, even
in this weak attempt at parody, but, whatev, dude.
Some nice bits about this story: You did manage to write in English,
and for the most part spell things right. For the most part.
I'm not worth Chibish's time.
Eight words: What the hell do you have against Winry!?
Seriously, what did she do to deserve your hate?- Oh! That's right, if
she isn't around, then Edward and Alphonse are free to bang each
other/Roy/Envy/Hughes/any other character in the show without a female
influence 'interfering' with the hawt sexxorz. Because Fullmetal Alchemist is
al about the bishies. I had forgotten for a second.
But seriously (again), Ed & Al love Winry (as a sister to my knowlage).
They would never hurt her. The Ed & Al in your story however... ugh,
where are the real Elric brothers? They'd kick these imposter's a**'.
In closing (because I shouldn't ramble), a hearty 'eff you' for
mangling characters that would kick your a** three ways from Tuesday if they
ever caught wind of this (maybe not Al... he might though).
P.S. I've found more humorous things on the bottom of my shoe.
Seriously, what did she do to deserve your hate?- Oh! That's right, if
she isn't around, then Edward and Alphonse are free to bang each
other/Roy/Envy/Hughes/any other character in the show without a female
influence 'interfering' with the hawt sexxorz. Because Fullmetal Alchemist is
al about the bishies. I had forgotten for a second.
But seriously (again), Ed & Al love Winry (as a sister to my knowlage).
They would never hurt her. The Ed & Al in your story however... ugh,
where are the real Elric brothers? They'd kick these imposter's a**'.
In closing (because I shouldn't ramble), a hearty 'eff you' for
mangling characters that would kick your a** three ways from Tuesday if they
ever caught wind of this (maybe not Al... he might though).
P.S. I've found more humorous things on the bottom of my shoe.
Off reference to a squirrel.
Oh... My... God... Oh.. My.. ********' GOD!! What the HELL have you done
to the real Ed, Al, and Winry, and who are these imposters?
There are no words for this. There are just no words to describe how
gut-wrenchingly, terribly, painfully awful this piece of "writing" is.
Oh, wait, maybe a long anguished scream will do.
Winry is a good character, and whether or not you like her, Ed and Al
care for like a sister. They would NEVER, EVER do something like this
to Winry. Winry would never let them, either.
Please just die, and take this "story" (though it hardly rates the
term) with you.
I must go spork out my eyes now.
to the real Ed, Al, and Winry, and who are these imposters?
There are no words for this. There are just no words to describe how
gut-wrenchingly, terribly, painfully awful this piece of "writing" is.
Oh, wait, maybe a long anguished scream will do.
Winry is a good character, and whether or not you like her, Ed and Al
care for like a sister. They would NEVER, EVER do something like this
to Winry. Winry would never let them, either.
Please just die, and take this "story" (though it hardly rates the
term) with you.
I must go spork out my eyes now.
Short and sweet.
Do us a favor, never write again. There was nothing remotely good or
logical about this thing. Jesus christ on a pogo stick, how hateful and
rabid can you be?
logical about this thing. Jesus christ on a pogo stick, how hateful and
rabid can you be?
Uhh...yeah. Shut up.
I've never written a flame before. Because I've never really read
anything poorly written enough or OOC enough to constitute one.
This is quite possibly the worst thing I have ever read in my life.
It's terribly OOC. Were you paying attention in the episodes at all? Ed
and Al care for Winry deeply. That's why when Winry does get a little
bitchy, he doesn't blow up at her. Because Winry is like a sister to them.
You totally butchered all that.
If you want to write something like this and share it with your
friends, that's fine. But don't post it. It's pure s**t.
anything poorly written enough or OOC enough to constitute one.
This is quite possibly the worst thing I have ever read in my life.
It's terribly OOC. Were you paying attention in the episodes at all? Ed
and Al care for Winry deeply. That's why when Winry does get a little
bitchy, he doesn't blow up at her. Because Winry is like a sister to them.
You totally butchered all that.
If you want to write something like this and share it with your
friends, that's fine. But don't post it. It's pure s**t.
But I did, in fact, get one nice review out of it all (not gonna change username, because I've thought she's been cool BEFORE she read any of my fics):
Winry the Alchemist
I liked that. I loved that. I thought it was hilarious.
All of Al's lines were ******** HILARIOUS. Omigosh. I love the "Al was
actually crying now. He continuously hit her head on the ground. "Why
must you make this series less-likeable, DAMN YOU?"" That ruled.
Right more bashes, because that was awesome.
All of Al's lines were ******** HILARIOUS. Omigosh. I love the "Al was
actually crying now. He continuously hit her head on the ground. "Why
must you make this series less-likeable, DAMN YOU?"" That ruled.
Right more bashes, because that was awesome.
And you thought I liked the show? I would never, never, EVER stoop as low at to INSULT something another person made with their own two hands. EVER. That's just something you shouldn't do in your life.
So, yeah. Not that the reviews didn't make me giggle or anything.
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Interesting.