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hey guys i got more feedback so here's chapter 3

CHAPTER 3:

So, the guys walked in. Let me tell you that was a big surprise for me. I looked at the guys with a look that made them feel even more uncofortable than they already were. I tried so hard not to laugh. They stood there for a few moments without saying anything. Those were the most tense moments so far. Well, so far that he'd been at the hospital. Man, are these guys that nervous Jeremy thought. Then one of the guys had the guts to break the silence. Thank god these morons don't have guts at all. They just act like it Jeremy thought to himself trying not to laugh.

"Uhhh..... we're so sorry about what happened and..... we got you something. We just felt kinda bad about what happened and we felt like it was our fault. So.... here.", one of the guys said. Then he was handed a card and a hat. But, it wasn't just any hat. It was one of the hats that the guys wore all the time to show they were all friends.

"We just wanted to be rfirends. We see now that the way we treated you wasn't easy for you to take or for anybody as a matter of fact. So, we just want you to be our friend. We see you have a lot more courage than we'll ever have. So, what do ya say? Want to be friends?", the same guy asked. jeremy sat there a minute and then nodded. Then the guys let out a sigh of relief. After that they all had a great time. Jeremy told them when he'd be home if everything went well. They were all friends now. Jeremy was so happy. But, that's when it all stopped. The nurse came in and said they had to leave. Visiting hours were over. So, the guys and Rose left. Now, Jeremy was alone. He got the same feeling he did before when the guys weren't his friends. He felt lonely and useless. The only thing he could think of doing was to go to sleep. So, that's what he did. He fell into a deep sleep......

That's the end of chapter 3 guys. so, give me feedback and i'll write the next chapter soon. see ya laterz! bye!






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whatisannarissesei
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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 01, 2008 @ 09:25pm
again, you switched perspectives again.... and a few spelling errors, but its good that your writing


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