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I don't know what i'll put in here. Who does? All i know is that you're going to get a large variety of things over an extended period of time, if i actually get around to using it... Anyway, roam around and enjoy. If nothing of mine suffices, there
The enchantment
Tell me what you all think. I want critisism! Thanks people.

“Ann,” Riane cried as she saw her little friend in amongst the crowd.
Having heard her name, Ann spun around. “Hey!” She replied with just as much enthusiasm in her sweet, musical voice. They hugged.
“Are you enjoying the musical so far?” Riane asked.
Ann opened her mouth to reply, but a rather immature masculine voice cut in. “I thought it was funny when the guy almost fell off the back of the desk.”
“Hey Andrew,” Riane said turning around to see an athletic figure and a rare grin. “You know, I think I missed that part.”
A gentle tap on the shoulder stole Riane’s attention. She felt like she was being bombarded by people. She turned to find her dad standing behind her.
“Hey Ren, do you want something to drink?”
Riane thought for a while, making it seem like such a hard question to answer, “Ah, yeah, thanks.” She promised to find her friends again later, before leaving with her dad.
Thanking him once again, Riane disappeared just after throwing an empty can into the bin. She began to manoeuvre her way through a large, boisterous, crowd. It didn’t taker her long to find Ann with the rest of the gang.
After a quick look around the group, she noticed Andrew was missing. Trying to ignore his absence, Riane joined in on the conversation. It didn’t take long though, for Riane’s thoughts to stray…Where was he?
As Riane started to look around the room, she glimpsed someone who grabbed her attention. However, When she went to have a closer look at him, he was gone. Along with him, went her memories of him. She tried hard to hang onto them, but they just kept fading away. It wasn’t long before she could no longer remember the sandy hair, and the soft penetrating, blue eyes, or even the fact that there was something unusual in his appearance. All she could remember was that he had been there…
Through the use of her name, Riane was pulled out of her thoughts. “Are you ok?” Ann was asking. “You look a little pale.”
Riane nodded, “Yeah, I think I’ll just go outside for a little while.”
After ducking and weaving her way through the crowd for a second time, Riane stood in front of the door. Gently she opened it and walked outside of the building. A cool breeze gently brushed against her skin. Riane made her way over to a wall and sat against the rough exterior.
Why did he maker her feel so divided? For she did indeed feel divided. Split right down the middle. Even though now he was just a ghost of a memory, seeing him made her feel hot and cold at the same time. She had felt safe and vulnerable. The sudden split inside her had been unnerving.
A swift movement tore Riane away from her thoughts. Pulling herself up, off the wall, she walked towards it slowly. Being out at night always had an effect on Riane. Everything always seemed scarier. Curiosity would always over power Riane’s fear, and so, she trekked on.
Riane stopped around the area she had thought she’d seen it. Whether something had been there or not, it wasn’t there now. She walked a bit further and peaked around a corner. Nothing. Riane sighed and headed back towards the hall. There it was again. The same movement. Just on the outskirts of her vision. Aware that she had seen it, Riane was determined to find out what it was. Hastily she raced towards where it had been.
“Riane? What are you doing here?”
Riane jumped. She had been to far into the moment and his approach had been unnoticed.
“Don’t do that! You scared me! I was feeling a bit flustered so I came out for some fresh air, and then I saw… Why are you here?” Unintentionally, she asked the question rather accusingly.
Andrew looked at Riane. He was looking at her in that way again. The same way he seemed to be always looking at her. It was hard to describe. Almost like he was lost in thought, but he wasn’t. Like he was there and not there at the same time.
“Walking,” He answered bluntly. “Lets go back. The second half will start soon.”
Riane looked at that spot one last time before she allowed herself to walk back towards the hall. She guessed some things were never meant to be known.
Almost as soon as they started walking, they stopped. “I just remembered that I left my jacket on a bench somewhere. You go on ahead. I’ll catch up.”
Andrew ran away before Riane had a chance to protest. Unsure of what to do, Riane stood there perplexed. For some reason it seemed quiet. Almost unnervingly quiet. Riane was just about to start heading back when a sensation ran through her. Riane moved towards the wall. Just as she did so, something moved passed her and disappeared. It gave of a chilling feeling. She wished Andrew would hurry up. The sooner she got inside, the better. How could getting his jumper take him so long? Riane wondered if something might have happened to Andrew. Starting to worry, she walked hastily in the direction Andrew had run in. Seeing a flash of light just around the corner, Riane moved faster.
She stopped. Standing right in front of her were two people – Andrew and guy that looked somewhat familiar. They were fighting each other. Not with fists, but with magic! Riane quickly moved back around the corner and pressed herself against the wall.
Before she had a chance to gather her thoughts, the two seemed to stop fighting. She could hear Andrew slowly walking towards her. Riane didn’t know what to do. She could make herself know to Andrew, or try to beat him back to the hall. He was walking slowly…Riane would be able to reach the hall before him, and then he would never know she knew…






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ruuka soukaye
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commentCommented on: Mon Aug 27, 2007 @ 11:08pm
It was very good i thought.. but just a little confusing. There was a part near the beggining i couldn't really tell if you jumped ahead some or was still on the same line of track.. i think you should add a little more description and make things just a little smoother in progress. otherwise its great. 3nodding


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