once i saw

• Artist: rosiegirl227
• Description: when i was little i saw strange things in my dreams that noone else had ever thought of
• Date: 07/21/2009
• Tags: once dragon dream

It was Friday night,
when i put out the light,
the moon was gleaming,
as i started dreaming.

At the time i couldnt tell,
i was at the top of a castle until i fell,
i kept lungin' and lungin',
and then i fell into the dungeon.

The air was thick so i started gaggin,
and then i seen a big feirce dragon,
he was big and green,
and he looked very mean.

I wanted to figfht,
but he was out of sight,
i woke up heavily breathing,
i thought to myself i was only dreaming!

Comments

[HTOB]

like it but u spelled fight wrong
the second section doesn't really make sense
wrry less about rhymin and more about feelings and it will com together
i like it though

[lautnerrules43]

thats cool, but i would say enstead of dreaming, having you compare the dragon and all to your life. metaphors like that are often used in professional poetry.