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whee OOOOOOOH THIS IS SO EXITING! I'm just spitballing here, but maybe Shinta will run? sweatdrop Just a thought. Part 5 has a spelling error, you wrote one instead of on. In part 4 I think you spelled Shinta's name Shita. Sorry. sweatdrop If I had flash, this would be a major series on deviantart and newgrounds already. The story is really unique and the charectars are the kind people would make fansites for. I have tons of story ideas, but if only I could write as well as you!

Ah, nice guess... I couldn't figure out where you got that idea from until I re-read the section a few times. Then I figured you thought Shinta was staring at Kavvana in horror or something after Kavvana had just killed some other attacker... But it was Shinta who "attacked" kavvana. Thought that doesn't seem like Shinta, now does it? Only I know the secret as to why Shinta lunged at Kavvana like that. But I'm sure you can figure it out too!

Uh, part VI is the last chapter... so there isn't anything else following it. I know the final chapter/section sucks but I tried. There's more, but uh... I don't know if I'm posting it or not. It's kind of complicated since ... well... *shrugs*

When I first began reading the first chapter I just couldn't stop. It was way too exciting, and I could see the characters infront of me while reading it. You've got a great talent^_^ I really like the main character Kavvana. If I was to live the same way he does I'd react the same way. What I was actually going to say was: I'll keep reading 'til the end. (though I hope it never ends...)

D'awww...That's kinda sad. D:
XD
But the choker kind a pisses me off. Sure, a lovely fashion charm or butifulness, but still! D<
Oh, and I also love the thing where Shinta is singing and Kavvana says he sounds like he's on crack. It's a pretty poem-chorus-verse thing. XD

The choker plays a big part in Kavvana's life.
XD I dunno I didn't like that part where he said 'you sound like you're on crack'. That was a way of me actually putting down my own little poem thing so that if people read it and hated it they'd be like "oh well at least Kavvana thinks it sucks." XD

Yeah and it's Kavvana's past. It's supposed to be sad with a hint of darkness lurking in his future.
The shinta thing was like a hint of homo, but it was also my way of saying love has no form and anyone who says love can only occur between a man and a woman is full of it.