Closer, Closer

• Artist: Taikou Valkyrie
• Description: A ballad made by:
  me(of course!!!),
  Jeanine,
  Michelle,
  Dakota,
  and Angel.
  It is about a boy who dared to venture through a haunted house, touches a shiney pocket watch, and ends up in limbo.
• Date: 11/15/2011
• Tags: closer closer

The fear still on my face
I remember that day
I still tremble in fear
Like it was just yesterday.

Wind blowing leaves over the yard
Walking up those creaky steps
Fear running up and down my spine
Closer, closer, closer, still I crept.

Hand on the doorknob
Shivering from the cold
"Who's there?"someone cried in a sob
"Who's that?" I said so bold.

"Do not enter for fear of death
Come in if you dare accept."
Fear running up and down my spine
Closer, closer, closer, still I crept.

And still I opened the door
Then there was eerie silence
As I walked through the house
I saw the signs of violence.

As I walked back towards the door
I saw a shining light and lept
Fear running up and down my spine
Closer, closer, closer, still I crept.

I saw it was a pocket watch
"Touch the watch and you will vanish"
Unbelieving I touched the watch
And from reality I was banished.

Comments

[Professor_Posh]

Wow. Okay, I love the repetition of; "Closer, closer, closer still I crept." It's a great pull and just drags me deeper down the rabbit hole. the story itself may be simplistic, but the writing is not. I loved separated couplet in the first cluster, and the occasional non-rhyme was a great pain-inducer which worked wonderfully with the story!