Let me toss in my grave

• Artist: 1so_so11rry_ari11
• Description: I just wrote a poem about me wanting to die because I have my moments where it just seems like everyone just has givin up on me and its like what the hell
• Date: 10/25/2009
• Tags: toss grave death scream heart

I'll just sit in the background
Watching the show go
Breathing in slo-mo
This day is so slow

Crying out blood drops
Hoping my hearts stops
Picking out love me nots
I just have one shot

Russian Roulette
One more bullet to go
My happiness shows
Bouncing on my toes

Let me rest in uneasiness
Tossing in my grave
Hoping the ground caves
And sucks me in

Let me rest in an uncomfortable position
Everyone listen
To slowing of my heart
//////______________

You may be
on the edge of your seat
uneasy
Is this to creepy

Let your heart begin to melt
As I'm shouting for help
But no one listens to my deafining scream
This can't be what it seems

So just let me rest
Your hand upon my chest
MY cold flesh bruised
Did I leave to soon?

Comments

[Deadlylight6]

yes very good indeed but, ur rhymes look so forced, like u had to make every line rhyme. im not telling u how to write, its just sometimes its better and/or easier to let it all flow from mind to hand without much thought. not everything needs to rhyme. 4/5

[O_annayasha_chan_O]

yeah make that 3 ppl who will love you no matter what ^^ agh youre so talented! haha good job this is amazing as always smile

[ShannenChan]

I've been there. There are times that I thought that no one loved me...but I hung in and suffered through the hard times and I am so so happy I did. I got out of that bad place and was lucky enough to have wonderful people in my life who I know will never give up on me. It may be terrible now, but there's always hope for a better life. Every time I've lost something precious I found something better, even if it took some time to come around. So don't give up!

[290DarkStars]

lol ^^ dont worry Im not laughing at your poem, Im laughing at how clever and perfect it is ^^ well done my friend, but please dont fret, your not alone... there are at least two people that will love you no matter what ^^ me and the man upstairs. And dnt worry Im sure that hell is a lot worse once your there wink 5/5 my friend. you are my new idol x)

[Sleepym22]

@HotShot1489 Poetry can express any kind of emotion wether happy or sad. To limit herself to only one form a emotional writing would be depriving the world of something great. ^^

5/5 Keep it up Ari!

[HotShot1489]

ummmmm kinda disturbing.... You should write happier poems/lyrics.... You are a good writer so uh yea