My Reality

• Artist: BlissForDaze
• Description: I came up with this in a matter of minutes, but it was hard to come up with this persons visions and thoughts, though.
• Date: 08/17/2009
• Tags: reality

Summer sun blazing on my neck,
flies swarming around the fields,
back-breaking labor.
This is my reality.

I look to the road,
for nothing in particular.
Just wishing my mind would wonder off to a better place.

Then I see it.
Snowflakes free falling,
winter chill on my face.
So cold, yet so inviting.

My safe haven is disturbed when I hear the cracking of the whip.
The only sound ive heard for years.

I do what I am told, for I wish not to be punished.

I am quiet while doing daily tasks,
I am even quiet in the dead of night, just looking up at the stars in envy.
How they are able to cross the world in one night, while I haven't been outside of this living hell for as far as I can remember.

No one speaks to me, and I speak to no one.
Except when answering my betters.

This is my reality.

Comments

[AuroraRoze]

It was great, I don't get why you don't write like this at school. ;D good job 5/5

[TrueExile]

Wow....I felt as if i was actually in her shoes...good poem >.< keep writing!! 5/5

[tea loaf]

There's room for improvement; current writing styles suggest dropping uneeded pronouns to make it short and sweet. 4/5

[BlissForDaze]

lyke many, this is a poem that i wrote off the top of my head and i respect creative criticism.

[ProfessorKC]

What harsh truth? It tells a great story of slavery to something but never exactly what unless it is indeed about slavery. Well written though.

[xXninjabatXx]

This is great. It gives insight into the harsh truth we all try to ignore. Good job.