Imaginary Friend

• Artist: KELLYrific
• Description: just one of the many "poems" i write when im depressed......
  **im VERY bad a spelling so please DONT tell me if i spelt something wrong**
• Date: 07/20/2009
• Tags: imaginary friend

There is a hole in my chest,
you put it there.
I had no one else,
but you.

I must have been talking to myself,
because you never listened.
I had thought you cared,
but i was sadly mistaken.

You were never there,
but i thought you were.
Only a figment of my imagination,
you were.

You kept me alive,
for some time.
Now i want to die,
because of you.

I now call you my imaginary friend,
because thats all you ever were.

Comments

[Nycholas Flamel]

Perfect. Absolutely perfect. There isn't a 15/5 option is there? Oh well, 5/5 will do.

[LOL Chubby Rainbow LOL]

Sorry to be harsh in my judgement of your work, but I would rather be mean now so you can see what can be changed and try it a little bit differently. If your going to do prose you have to be consistent. I actually liked your poem until it got down to the fourth stanza. It is because the flow of that verse doesn't match the rest. If you did it on purpose to invoke an uneasy feeling in the reader, then it is absolutely genius but for some reason I doubt that. "Four out of Five"

[lovedragon05]

So depressing, I surely feel the pain.

[silly_clown_103]

i really like this its sweet!