One Year

• Artist: jennifer_1991
• Description: i wrote this poem for my bf when we had been going out for a year (and we are still together^^ ) it was written on a canvas with my very first scenery painting^^ i hope you like...this is also my very first happy poem and i think it turned out well, please tell me what you think
• Date: 01/28/2009
• Tags: year love startingout

before this time a year ago
you ran through my mind always on the go
wondering if you felt the way i did
or if those feelings should be hid
a note i wrote with your name upon
scared to give i did hold on
soon i wondered what you would have said
this thought too ran through my head
time was speeding up as the days flew past
summer was coming and coming fast
i hoped to see you among those days
to see your face and be in your gaze
but when i got home on the net you were
we started talking but i still wasn't sure
but then when you asked if i liked you
all i could say was yes, yes i do
now hear we are a year ahead
still together you still in my head
but now you don't run through my mind
you walk much slower and i cherish all the time.

Comments

[jennifer_1991]

no longer together and soon to have another sad poem on here because of what an a*****e he has become v.v

[jennifer_1991]

thank you very much^^ im really happy to hear you like this one so much and for the advice i never thought of leaving words out after i thought of them ^^; but i think i will keep this one their since it was also in the poem i gave my bf but i will remember that for the future. ^^

[Scruffy_dog02]

Awe!~ This is adorable!! It's great that you and your boyfriend are still with eachother, love is a wonderful thing ^^ Now, about the poem, it's excellent. There's no better way to say it smile Although. . . one tiny thing. . . I don't think you should change it at all, but on the last line "and I cherish all the time" I would leave out the "all" In poetry, you can leave out words that aren't really significant. But feel free to keep it the way it is; it's beautiful ^^