Don't fear me

• Artist: david the lost boy
• Description: I made this
• Date: 01/20/2009
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Time for you to die
You are to weak to cry
Close your eyes, breath in deeper
come on don't fear the reaper
Time to find your home in the ground

Time to move on
look the sun is gone
I can feel your heart sink deeper
I am the reaper
Follow me to your doom

Comments

[david the lost boy]

thanks for telling my how you feel about my poem

[Tekeja16]

This is a good poem in my opinion.. but could you use more detail or expression maybe even make it longer?You may not like my judements and I am sorry if you don't... but I can't live around what other people think.

[littleblackcat3]

I don't want to sound too critical because I have a certain way that I write my poetry, and I think it's good that people have their own system going. However, I am not sure if you would like any constructive critism, but I find that this poem could do with some more imagry. I must say, I don't use much in mine, but I can feel that you are trying to say something (or at least i think so) but I am not quite getting it.On the flip side, I think this is a really cool idea for a poem. I particular