Devouring the Life

• Artist: chi0lea
• Description: Well it was supposed to be a song but i think it seems more like ohh what are those poems called that don't rhyme? well if you think it could be a song tell me if you think it should be a poem tell me... or if i could put it into a story under you know how in a story a person says something then it says how they feel after something happens but no one hears them cause it's in their mind
• Date: 01/17/2009
• Tags: devouring life

Devour the life on which you call
This is the path in which you fall
Passing through the heartless call
The fading life has passed us all

I'm not the same without you
I'm ready to back down, I'm madder then hell
Burning hotter each day nothing can stop me now
As i start go mad it's to late to start a new
Even as the world spins never going back never
Turning away from you, Your the friend I never
Knew but you left me alone, Now I'm fighting
For my life, As I try to calm down only pain
Can help me now, you brought this to my life now
My faith must die, As you see my heart devour
You devour another heart that was once depressed
And now compressed by your friendship
This can not help us now
This isn't how it supposed to end
You were the one who was closest to me now
Your Devouring the Life...

Comments

[Mud99]

Free verse dosen't rhyme and sililoquy is the characters thoughts made known to the audience, this would go great on a urinal puck for a public bathroom.

[Cathedral Az]

I like the rhythm of it. You had a couple of grammatical errors, but there's just me being picky. All in all, I enjoyed it.