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All around me is this darkness
That these so called poets express
All they see is their own failures
All they see is their small corners
If they would but turn around
If they would but hear the sound
Of life and love that’s all about
They would see their folly now
Here I sit upon my mountain
Watching poets writhe, outspoken
In the darkness they’ve created
Blind to all the world, elated
And I think, what foolish fellows
Standing on reluctant gallows
“Look around,” I shout from up there,
“At the world so bright and so fair!”
“Will they hear me?” I ask no one
For I’m by myself on my mountain
“Never” says a voice from below
“Best get used to being alone”
- by Wicker Chair |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/02/2009 |
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- Title: Sermon on the Mount
- Artist: Wicker Chair
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Description:
Be mindful of the rhythm please.
Otherwise, this one's self explanatory. - Date: 01/02/2009
- Tags: sermon mount
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Comments (5 Comments)
- hikuninza - 05/07/2014
- Nice job. The rhyming is quite interesting. I'm not sure about the 3rd and 4th line though of the 2nd stanza. I think you are trying to rhyme by vowels? But it is kind of weird.
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- Moonlight_Maiden123 - 01/20/2009
- hmmm interesing, i cant explain y, im just tounge tied, nice work
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- Kibroth - 01/02/2009
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Good work. I like the over all feel and good choice of meter for the subject.
Tough choice on words for the last two lines of the second canto, but I think you might be able to find ones that rhyme with a little bit of creative effort & thought. smile )
All in all, well done. 4/5
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- crazydrunkpenguin - 01/02/2009
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