Thy love of mine

• Artist: Emmazworld
• Description: Thy love of mine was pretty mich how I feel about some one special.
• Date: 12/22/2008
• Tags: imfalling

Thy Love of Mine
why can't you tell me
whats in side...
will it be hatred or
shall it be love?


Thy love speak up
speak up
of your feelings inside
do you love me
or not do you hate me
or what....

tell me my love
for I am falling
just for you,only you...
don't you care thy love
we do make a pair
I wouldn't call it a scare.

Your love your care
is at my heart and forever it shall stay there
and I am falling down
death is near
my love tell me
you will be here
no matter where I
want you there.

No don't leave me
not now I am truely
in dispair
Thy love whats
inside shall it be love
in there
or shall it be hatred
upon me
I am falling
but you can not even catch me
Iv'e gone to long
without knowing
where to go

Thy love of mine
why can't you tell
me whats inside
will it be hatred
or shall it be
love

Thy love whats inside

Comments

[ceresB]

When you say 'Iv'e gone to long
without knowing
where to go' did she die and becomes a ghost but still haunting her lover asking about whether he loves her or not?If thats so,its a good one.

[Dorian Wanhope]

Well I like the concept and how you are trying to talk but its seems that you use the word thy just because it sounds nice. Thy is a formal word and doesn't follow with the rest of the dialect. Also your linebreaks seem pretty odd, because whenever I read a line I finally get into it and have to pause and start over making each line meaningless on its own. Try and use the metaphor of falling less for it just gets redundant after a period. I hope that helps.

[rileyzworld]

5 excellent! I envy whoever is special to you!! if I could rate you a 100,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000 i would
gladly!!

[rileyzworld]

lovely! i loved itmore than anything!!

[CuTi3_aNa]

Really great!