How could you

• Artist: Yami Yufakai
• Description: This is a little somtin i wrote because my gf just cheated on me. its not realy a poem but a little writing.
• Date: 12/04/2008
• Tags: could hate love

I loved you so much. We had so much. You took my heart and fixed it. Then you broke it bit by bit. You went with another man and got drunk and pregnet. Your going to get a abortion....... how could you kill a heart just like that. You dont understand how much i hurt. Your becoming what i despertly try to reduce or destroy. You have become injustice. How could you just kill me like this. But now all i think is I hate everything about you why do i love you. How am i supposed to put you away and leave you in the cold.

Comments

[kage kokoro 10]

Dang its been so long since i lost this account XD, my "yami yufakai" era was a good one

[Azzadar]

All I can say is I'm sorry. I know it isn't much, so I'm gonna give you 5 stars too.
That made me think about why I dumped my last BF.

[xxBrunoMarsxx]

dude she didnt deserve u

[Pyrrhic Victini]

If this isn't poetry or lyrics, I'm not sure why this is in this category. Though this is sad, that does not necessarily make it creative. Try mixing around with sentence length to make it sound better. Cleaning up your grammar & spelling would help as well. The more you mix around with wording & phrasing the more emotion a person will feel from the piece.

[The Love of Money]

You have my sympathy.

[BeastofNoor]

I can see why you feel that way. I couldn't ever stand it if that happened to my gf. I would be dead by now if that happened.

[II Azazel II]

that is a really amazing poem there is a ton of sadness and discust