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A toss of a silver coin
Lands on my groin
the payment of my life
My hopes end at the edge of a knife
Pumpkin seeds and brown leaves vertigo
My skin rots to a pale indigo
Candy apples and razor blades
Thrown upon their empty graves
The forgotten who never spoke
The ones they tease and poke
If we have noticed
If they have taken their time
Never time for a lonely lotus
They were the ones to commit this crime
We sit alone in a wind tunnel of screams
They never saw us sit there through their lives of flavored creams
We never asked for attention
They never tried, do you need an explanation?
Bawl in your room and squeeze
The teddy bear, hey fever, a wheeze
Dad came in and beat me again
To tell my therapist will be a sin
Thats what my mom said
If I did I will be dead
If we have noticed
If they taken their time
Never time for a lonely lotus
They were the ones to commit this crime
We are talent, beauty, hidden
Crying alone in the kitchen
Bleeding on the floor
Suicide, super gore
Smoking to steady my nerves
Always admiring the others curves
What a special vessel with grand popularity
Beaten into you "ugly, fat, and hairy"... a conspiracy
Liked by few, known my none
Rocking back and forth, crying on my gun
If they have noticed
Only if they knew my rhyme
If they knew who wrote this
They could of saved me this time
Age long story
Of old gory Corey
Taken for granted then tainted
The murder of his plaintiff
Never learned the silver tongue
Now dumb and on the run
Never had the glory or the self esteem
Guilty by view, he is deemed
He could of made it if we had noticed
If we knew it was he who wrote this
- by Meltone_Revenants |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/04/2008 |
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- Title: The Lonely Lotus
- Artist: Meltone_Revenants
- Description: This is a poem that revived me into the poem world. I kinda stopped but after this i started writing again. I hope you all like it as much as I do.
- Date: 12/04/2008
- Tags: lonely lotus
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Akorn23 - 10/03/2009
- I love it very amazing in every way goosebumps collected on my arm when I read this.
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- SilvertongueSagittarius - 12/07/2008
- it wud have been a 4 but you used the word "groin" and I just dont think that was needed.(I dont care about the word being "bad" or sumthin, u just shud've found a better place for the coin to fall) so...3/5
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- mychocolatesparkle - 12/06/2008
- I agree with Merko_shiningamiform. Some things don't make sense. But I don't agree that you should change things. I love it the way it is. It wouldn't be your poem if someone told you to change it right.
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- sixsmith - 12/06/2008
- It's a good poem, but some phrases don't make much sense. Just read it over, aloud, and fix up the parts that don't sound right. Then it'll be great!
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- Meltone_Revenants - 12/05/2008
- so like no one comments and they rate my poem low. I would like to hear some constructive criticism.
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- Meltone_Revenants - 12/04/2008
- If you like this poem search my other poem the Bat's Craving in Arenas, its my remake of the Raven. You'll enjoy it. Well... I hope.
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