Cut my Heart Openby James

• Artist: Caveman Jim
• Description: a song i wrote a few about my gf cheating on me,it has the first few words ofa song,but the rest is property of me
• Date: 09/24/2008
• Tags: heart openby james

you said it's all said and done,i can't beleive you were the one,to cut it up and bleed it through i guess that's just you.

Chorus
you cut my heart open,tore it to shreds,you planned it since the first day we met,i should have known from the start,that you would be the one,to break my heart.

i love you.i hate you.i can't beleive i hesitated for you! it was a waste of my time,i should have known that you didn't love me.

you left me behind,but i still treated you kind.yet you cheat on me,for that you shall pay!

Chorus
you cut my heart open,tore it to shreds,you planned it since the first day we met,i should have known from the start,that you would be the one,to break my heart.

Guitar Solo
1.notes slow down to get a sense of love and affection
2.notes speed up giving less care in sound
3.notes come quickly and loudly,like a sense of hate.

and now you leave me at your door,i can't beleive i asked for more,your just an ignorant person,you don't know love.you don't know anything....
(drums start to play feircley)
but you left me for him and now you'll both pay,while i think of a way to kill you both,right now i'll just say(sayyyyy) that i cared for you,i cherished you(youuuuuuu) and now you leave me like this now i got a burning inside of meeeeeeeee.and someday,it will come out,and burn you to ashes,and that's why i'm saying,you shouldn't have pushed me away( away,away, away)
you left me crying in the rain,i knew it would never be the same so now i end this harmony,hoping you know that i'll never forgive you(youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu) (guitar and drums fade and the song ends)

Comments

[Creepy Gabriella]

Wow this was really strong. Not only does it rhyme but it portrays the obvious pain behind it. Excellent job.

[Diegosmells]

good ryhiming.
^_^

[Caveman Jim]

i looked back at this and i just realized.it was good when i thought of it but now it SUCKS

[Cannibal- a n n i b a l]

Definetly cliche lol
You should think about using more indirect ways of expressing things
Like metaphors and symbols
It adds a great twics to a song and makes it much more interesting to read :]

Your ryhiming scheme is great though
^.^
Keep writing Michigo!

[Shiko Uchiha]

you didnt have to add a guitar piece idea like i did, i am a guitarist, those notes were for me, when i work on the melody.

the chorus was good. but the rest was kinda shaky, but its a work in progress.

[Summer Fallwinterspring]

Um, kind of cliche and REALLY hard to read