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Kisses
We walk
Arm in arm
My heart races
A shiver runs down my spine
You put your arm around me
I kiss your forehead
You turn your head
Our lips touch
Bliss
We pull away
I blush
You giggle
We walk
- by cyanideflavoredlove |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/09/2008 |
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Comments (5 Comments)
- maydaymouse - 07/21/2009
- It's cute and very first kiss for a couple type of thing. 5/5^^ Rate back if you don't mind
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- guess beaniewatson - 07/21/2009
- It's cute. But I agree with the first comment, you can add more to it. It's like, when you read it, you're expecting more, you know? But it is really sweet=) 3/5
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- dakxmx - 09/11/2008
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ty...i gave it to my gf she said ur so sweet! ^^
very touching! 5/5 - Report As Spam
- mentaltofu - 09/11/2008
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i think i can rap this lol
jk
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- Helpline - 09/09/2008
- This seems more of a list rather than a poem. It seems as if you are writing a list in order of what you did. don’t get me wrong you did a good job, but what I would suggest would be to add more words to maybe make it rhyme and have a flow as well as meaning. =) 1/5
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