Through troubled eyes

• Artist: Toxik_Tonik
• Description: I don't know if I should leave it a poem or make it a song. . . .
• Date: 07/23/2008
• Tags: throughtroubledeyestriciatoxik

Through troubled eyes
The world finds a girl lost in the mist
Never knowing where to go
Or who to really trust

When hope is gone and worlds burn
One will remain the same
Away from pain and disappointment
One ordinary dame


She found her way out of the mist
And to see this barren land

Hammering on the window frame
Windows full of guilt and shame
Whispering secrets of the past
Knowing they will never last

Screaming fills our bleeding ears
And of our greatest fears
Painful as we watch them die
Painful as we watch them cry

Through troubled eyes
The world finds


Me. . . .

Comments

[IMPALER_PRINCE]

I like the contrast between the tone of the last line of the 2nd stanza and the 1st line of the 3rd. Sort of wish the mist transition meant a little more to the progression though..
Gaia standards: 3/5

[Kris Akane]

its amazing!,, when you read it you really get into it and see that you sometimes feel that way.

[BurningStarDust]

I really like it. It shows how we sometimes feel. As you read you get into it and the last stanza hits you with one simple word. Me. I thought it was powerful.

[Onixia91]

its good keep it as a poem

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

im not feelin it. poor rhymes. mist and trust rhyme as much as fish and bug rhyme.however, i like the 4th stanza