Kurayami My Roses Bloom For...

• Artist: Katsuya Jyonouchi
• Description: This poem is called Kurayami my Roses Bloom for you. I wrote it in a haiku format. Originally I was just writing haikus about my RP partner being away but I found that they were easily strung together into one large poem.
  
  I am pretty proud of this poem because it is the first time that I can remember that I followed any type of format for my poetry.
  
  EDIT- I forgot to add the word "The" in line two. It is supposed to be
  
  "The wind blows freely threw hair"
  
  
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: roses kurayami lonely

Take my hand Kura
Wind blows freely threw hair
I take the first fall

Into love I dive
Precious hopes collide within
Feeling a live love

One day we part ways
Your travels take you elsewhere
The phone on dial tone

A rose blooms with grace
How I long to see your face
I wait faithfully

Tear drops fall from a
Red dress that hangs in sorrow
Black creeping center

Threw many blooms I
Feel a great presence, Kura
Watching me soundly

Into your arms quick
tears of joy pour down my face
At the thought "return"

Comments

[Pencil Thin Gentleman]

Very, very good job. I have done things like this before and this one is rather amusing to me and encourages me to go and show one of mine here. I'll give it a four-out-of-five (Why I will explain to you personally.)

[Winry_Rockbell799]

I like this! smile nice job! i especially like the line "red dress that hangs in sorrow" very nicely done and also good job at following the format! 5 stars!