In Front of My Eye's

• Artist: Yuki Frozen
• Description: Some says that it's a bit annoying how I repeat the phrase "In Front of My eye's" on this. Okey then just read it. Enjoy? >.<
• Date: 11/01/2008
• Tags: tragic

In Front of My Eye's

In front of my eyes,
I saw nation's fight other nation's

In front of my eyes,
They make themselves tremble

In front of my eyes,
I saw murderer's that murder

In front of my eyes,
Tears was mix with blood

In front of my eyes,
My family were killed, I tremble

In front of my eyes,
I face the mirror

In front of my eyes,
I saw the Murderer.

by M.M.M Yuki Frozen

Comments

[tksunshine93]

i like it and the repetitiveness adds to the feel and really makes the end more in your face and unexpected

[Yuki Frozen]

Thanks 4 all your comments but the truth is I was more annoyed with that comment what will happen to my poem if I remove it. That someone advise me to erase the other in front of my eyes phrase. By the way T.Y! ^^

[_delted_--mfrag]

no, the repetitive phrase itent any more annoying the poe saying "never more" over and over again.

and the poem is very beautiful, and tells a grate story.

[DemeaningMeaning]

its a good one. is it about a world war? and no the phrase "In Front of My eyes " is not annoying.

[vampiress_of_the_dark]

reminising about things that are sad

[Lalilas]

COOL its kinda like i remember