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It was just a normal day for Anzei. Gentle winds touches his soft green hair, as music filled the air. Anzei was a traveling bard. He traveled the lands of Grahav for many years now. Unlike other bards he was special. He was a follower of Rivas the god of fire. He saw countless people and their lives, he even made friends in his long journey. He had no idea there he was or where he will go, but that's just a life of a bard. Anzei walked down on a old path, playing his harp with only one audience. There was something sitting at Anzei's shoulder, and that was a sprite. There are only 4 sprites in Grahav and one of them was the fire sprite. Anzei saved his life from drowning and now he swore to follow him where ever he goes. After the song ended a light applaud was heared. The little fire sprite applauded for Anzei for that beautiful song as Anzei just smiled at him. After a while they came near a town, it was filled with busy townspeople, men and women alike. This wasen't new for Anzei for he entered countless towns in his past journey, still it was his first time in this particular town.
As he neared the town gates a guard stopped him with his spear blocking Anzei's way. "What do you need from this wandering bard?" He asked calmly as he smiled to the guard. The guard was suprised, he didin't look like a bard, but as he saw his harp he quickly apologized and put his spear away. Anzei then entered the giant gates to find people talking and walking everywhere. There was a group of young females that was gigiling at him, he just replied to them a warm smile. After a while he finally saw the Inn. The first thing he smell ,when he opened the door, was ale. As he opened the door to have a beter look he saw big muscular men drinking ale and gambling. He appoched the Inn keeper with no worry at all. "Is there a room available?" he asked calmly as a pair of men started a fight just beside him. The little sprite was scared as he looked at the entire room just to see the same, Drunk men. The Inn keeper pointed at an old peice of wood with some writing. It said that a night costs 200 gold. Anzei scruffled trough her bag just to see some dirt and a peice of moldy bread. "I have no gold. But may I pay a night with a song from this wandering bard?" He said showing off his harp. The man nodded and made an announcement. "Hey this little fella will pay us a song for a night whatya' say?" he said holding a cup of ale.
The whole crowd went silent with scary eyes all pointing to Anzei. "Oh my Master.Budum.I think this is not a good Idea.Budum." The little fire sprite said trembling in fear. Anzei was in the complete oposite. He was just standing there smiling as he got ready to play. Then, the first notes were played, the whole crowd melted away with the warm tone and slow tempo. The mood was so strong that the people outside heared the music and stopped dead in their tracks. Anzei continued to play as he plucked the strings gently like a mother caring for her child. As the song ends the Men from the Inn and the people outside applauded as of there was a hero. Anzei bowed gracefully as he walked down to the Inn Keeper. "Is that enough for 200 gold?" he asked with a warm smile. The Inn Keeper laughed as he threw the keys at him. He faced the crowd and said "Well now, It's time for my leave..." he said as the crowd cheered for him.
(more in Chapter 1!!! If i get like 5? PM's saying if i would continue biggrin )
- by ForgottenGenesis |
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- | Submitted on 07/20/2009 |
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- Title: Music Ignited
- Artist: ForgottenGenesis
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Description:
Mainly a background story of my Universal RP character "Anzei" Some of you may know me....
My first time so don't be harsh...
This is only a Prolouge and if you wish, me to continue please PM me.
Other things just PM me... - Date: 07/20/2009
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Comments (4 Comments)
- TheGuardianArcana - 09/15/2009
- *seem D:
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- TheGuardianArcana - 09/15/2009
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Not bad so far, I wanna see the sprite of water ;3
The only thing I could really pick on would be the absence of commas and a few misspellings;
~4 (Numbers under twenty usually are spelt out)
~Heared ~Wasen't ~Giggiiling
~Smell (When meant as a verb)
That and the last paragraph seems to be a little... um... fast-paced maybe? Describing the music being played might help keep a reader focused, but I'm a Grammar Nazi with ADD so what do I know. Sorry if I seems a bit harsh, 4/5 >w<'' - Report As Spam
- Fantastic Nightmares - 09/07/2009
- "Anzei scruffled trough her bag just to see some dirt and a peice of moldy bread." Is it a she or he?
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- KiyoshisKiwi - 07/30/2009
- I love the story good deatialed I enjoyied it please do continue
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