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the title is I Dream
In my dream i was a snake in some what ways i am a good snake. I dream of myself being chase, being wanted be others seems everyone wants to kill me. There's this part in my dream where i am a slithering in a forest, where i come across a girl who is crying, she is sitting there all alone she cry's and cry's. Tears are rolling down her face, like water from a wind shield... from a distant she looks like an angel, as I start to come toward her she looks up, not a single fear was in her eyes, the way she looked at me was not like that way the other people see me
and before i knew it a smile came across her face as i slithered toward her. The way her face was pale as snow i knew at the moment i knew she must be sick or she wouldn't be sitting her crying all by her self. I then thought to myself she is somewhat like me being avoided by others. As i slither closer she lays her hand to me in some what ways she seem to put trust in me, at the very moment i can bite her or kill her but she lays her hand out to pick me up as i let her take me in her arms. I sat in her arms for quite some time before i knew it there were men with weapons running toward me and her. They then shouted to her to hand me over or she would pay the price. They told her that i was the last snake in the entire village. She then speaks ina soft gentle voice,"please let this poor snake go, he is but a living thing like our self
a heart let him go, for i see no danger in him. At once one of the men shouted," how do you know this snake is not dangerous."At once she
reply's," I have had this very snake in my arms for the last three hours and yet he does not bite me or harm me in any way, so how is he a dangerous snake." Suddenly two men came running toward her trying to grab me, she shouts if you come near me i have leper, at that very moment the two men backed away with fear in there eyes. One of the leaders then shouts toward her from a far distant," you there we will give you $100,000 dollars if you hand us the snake. She tells him," if i had refused in the beginning what makes you think i will change my mind
and money is no good use to me. For the people in the towns have prohibited me from the towns for money is no use to me. She then sneezes in all directions, at that the men starts to run for they are scared they might get the leper disease. The moment they are gone she whisper softly to me " I'm glad they are gone I hope they did not scare you my dear friend. She then starts to walk with me in her arms she walks in a journey, a journey that never seem to end....
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- Title: the dream
- Artist: honey_to_bunny
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the world - Date: 05/29/2009
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- MaryJeanStar - 07/28/2009
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I like how you said 'a journey that never seem to end', and then you bluntly state the story's ending.
But in all seriousness, this needs some major work. At first I figured English must not be your first language, but then I realized your articles were all correct. Trust me, this fact matters.
When referring to oneself in pronoun, it's important to capitalize the 'I' in 'I'.
I'd go on to point out your every flaw, but I see no need, as your story's current format lacks potential to begin with. - Report As Spam