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Waiting
A young girl sits on a short broken wall waiting. Her face is cast down looking a the dirt. Her clothes are torn and smudged with dirt. Her hair is horribally dishevled. She watches people pass by her through a haze. She is numb, her hand touches the wall and feels nothing. She says hello to the people walking by but no one acknowlages she is there. So she sits and waits may someone will see her maybe someone won't. Then some one walks up to her a boy, but he just passes through her hopping over the wall. She is extremely confused now. Then a man in a long black coat appears next to her. Takes her hand and leads her through a glowing white light.
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- by KimiAnnGin |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 10/19/2008 |
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- Title: Waiting
- Artist: KimiAnnGin
- Description: A young Girl waits for something. It's something she dosen't know. Though she knows something will come.
- Date: 10/19/2008
- Tags: waiting numb death
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Comments (1 Comments)
- YuzoraRyuu - 10/19/2008
- A very interesting entry. Some typos, but still very good content. I can sense some trouble with perhaps wording although it is comming rather smoothly. I like how you are using some extensive vocabulary. I am having a little trouble getting into the feelings of the character. Perhaps a little more emotional content. I suggest talking a little bit more about how the girl feels. Awesome work. 4/5
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