Vision

• Artist: Swift-Karate-Chop
• Description: This is a novel about a vampire named Sith, who meets the love of his life, a girl named Vision. Sith is blind, but walks through sound and smell, that is untill Vision comes along, who opens his eyes and instantly falls madly in love.
  this novel will be published Feb 18, 2009
  
• Date: 10/03/2008
• Tags: vision

"Where are we?" She asked, clearly in awe. "It's my place, a hideaway, I guess. Do you like it?" I was curious of her thoughts. "I think it's romantic, is that why you brought me here?" She had a look of enthusiasm in her eye as she walked toward me, with careful steps. "You decide, Vision." I always let her make the decisions. "I supose it is then." She walked slowly, each step unbuttoning her overshirt. Her brown hair flowed over her chest like an ocean. "Ah, I..." She cut me off, thrusting her arms over me, shoving me to the wall. I wrapped my hands around her chest, hers around my neck. "Holding hands at school bothers you, but having sex with a vampire in a cave doesn't?" I asked inbetween lips. "I'm complicated, but you're understanding, right?" She said.

chapter 1

I walked into the bathroom, and got the hair gel. I squeezed a dab into my hand and rubbed it through my hair. The gel felt cool as it ran along my head. I could hear my little brother running around the downstairs. His name was ramsun, he was twelve, and immature. He doesn't understand certain nessecities about life. For instace, love. I love a girl, he bites them. I could hold my girl all day long, but I'm worried about her. She doesn't yet know of my curse. Or my brother.

Brrring! The telephone rang loudly enough to shake the undergrounds. "Sith's getting it!" Shouted Ramsun as loudly as he could to be heard. "Thanks." I mumbled. "Ello?" I said. "Hey! You picking me up?" It was Vision. I always picked her up for school. "Hey, ya be there in a minute."

"Ah!" Vision screeched as I jumped from the ceiling. She clearly hadn't hear me hang up, she was still holding the phone. "H-h-how'd-" She scrambled for words. "I said a minute, did I not?" I inquired. "How'd you get in? When?"
"I found an open door" I lied as I covered up. "Let's go." I rushed to the door and got in my car................

Comments

[Holy Blood Saint]

wow amazing love u. wish i were vision and you were sith

[Wei Hui]

The premise is very interesting. There are a few mistakes here and there, such as you forgot to capitilize "Ramsun" when you first introduce him. Also, although it says in your description that Sith is blind, you have a habit of describing things that he'd only have been able to see. Such as how Vision looks enthusiastic, and how she was still holding the phone. On the other hand, the only times you describe visual things in when he's around Vision. Is this intentional?

[mossy rose]

Wow Matt, thats an awesome story!