The Blind Angel

• Artist: iDarkHearts
• Description: It's sad. It's my life.
• Date: 11/28/2008
• Tags: blind angel

There was this girl who could see the future of peoples deaths. When she closed her eyes one day, she had a dream that her best friend got ran over by a bus, she woke up, scared, she called her friend and told her and warn and her to watch out. But her friend didn't listen. A few days later her friend was ran over. Time went on and every time she closed her eyes, she saw som1 she knew die. Then she saw her mothers death. she'd had it, so she ran out to her graveyard, gouged her eyes out, wrapped her shirt around her head, and sat down in the graveyard. She tried to cry but pain swept over in a frenzy. Suddenly, something grabbed her foot, scared, she got up and tried to run, but she couldn't. I'm dead, she thought, and I know my job. And so she flies through the night, helping the ones she knew and the ones she didn't, find their way into the next world, something that she will never do.

Comments

[dawn~cutie]

I thought it was very creative...
it would be cool (since you are an artist) to see some illustrations to go with it! It would make a sweet graphic novel! 5/5 Good job! smile

[white horse93]

writing, not art. in the P.S. I put art. slip of the keyboard. I'm not good at multitasking, and I'm trying to listen to music. *blush* smile

[white horse93]

I sort of agree with Julia Dream... but it WAS really creative. a simple spellcheck would work on all your spelling errors, or a dictionary. I say 3/5, because it had creativity and imagination, but you went too fast with the storyline and the spelling and grammar was terrible. P.S. I'm trying to get enough money to submit a piece of art, so comment when you see mine up there!!! and don't bother about hurting my feelings with your critiques!!

[iDarkHearts]

@ Julia Dream -
...i am not a writer. i am an artist. i am not good with words. o.o; thanks for the crits, could have been nicer, but u got to the point quickly. ^^

[Julia Dream]

1/5.


Absolutely no attempt at pace, everything read like a really horrible children's story. Also, you use "some1."

[Pixals]

4/5 -1 for no capitalization..
Worth reading. Real creative.
Could you read and comment my story? It's called 'Manipulation'

[iDarkHearts]

ty ^^ it story for my avi entery for week 49, but it was too long to post there -_- but i glad u lik it XD vote for me thet week plz!